22A- Elevator Pitch No. 3
Elevator Pitch 3: https://youtu.be/VvENPEyFwDA
Reflection: A piece of feedback that I found very helpful
on elevator pitch number two was to shorten my opening. Someone had suggested
that I spent too long on the hook and did not allot much time to explaining the
product. Additionally, I was told to try to use less hand gestures since it
could become distracting. Most of the feedback was positive and encouraging
rather than constructive.
Change: I decided to take out some of the statistical
evidence I originally had. I decided to shorten it to just two pieces of statistical
evidence, so it didn’t seem like I was throwing out a ton of numbers. It
allowed me to spend more time explaining the product I have come up with to
minimize the annoyances customers receive from pushy employees. Also, I
minimized my hand movement throughout the pitch so that I do not distract the
viewer. Overall, I found this pitch to be the easiest. I feel it was the
easiest because it has become second nature and I did not have to refer to a
script. I was able to speak purely through memory and promote my product
shortly and sweetly.
I am open to additional feedback!!
Hi Brianna,
ReplyDeleteWell done with your third iteration of your elevator pitch! I could really tell that you took all of the advice you were given and implemented it very well. The pitch is really polished as a whole and is looking and sounding super crisp! I really don't have any feedback, as I think it's spot on. The only thing that I would maybe suggest is to add just a ~little~ more hand movement. I know that I said to limit it, but at times I could tell that you were holding back from it. Try to find the sweet spot, and keep up the great work!
Hi Brianna!
ReplyDeleteAgain, your pitch was an interesting listen and well planned. This iteration, however, was especially strong because you maintained an even tone of voice throughout the pitch and did not use filler words (like I tend to do), both of these things making you seem much more confident in your product and making me more interested in investigating your product further. Well done!
Hey Brianna. As soon as you started the pitch, you mentioned facts and statistics, which shows your knowledge and passion about the issue at hand, and also lets listeners know right away what you are going to discuss, but also that they are not alone. You used a perfect amount of hand gestures, as like you said, too much of this can be distracting. At this point, I agree that the pitch is the easiest, as it is second nature due to the repetition. Great work.
DeleteHey Brianna,
ReplyDeleteGreat job! Your pitch was very well done! Your idea was concise, well-explained and to the point. It was interesting to listen to, and clearly well planned. I can definitely tell you have revised your pitch each time and it continues to improve. Keep up the great work!